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학생이 쓴 원문
I absolutely agree with his saying.
Verbal violence inflicts on the mind.
Sometimes it is able to absolutely change someone\'s life.
And often it is stronger than physical violence.
There are many kinds of home education in the world.
Parents should think about what is a good education.
They should be careful not to verbalize their children.
I agree with the sentences that kindness is related to intelligence and sociality.
We can learn how to live together and how to socialize.
Sometimes it\'s very easy to commit violence mentally to others.
We can do that while we are not aware of it ourselves.
I don\'t want to do that.
So, I think that it\'s very important to look at the atmosphere when I saying.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I agree with what you said that it is easy to hurt others mentally and emotionally with our words. It\'s true that words can either break or make a person, so we have to be careful with our words. Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic. ^ ^
-Rachel
I absolutely agree with his saying.
>> I absolutely agree with his idea.
Verbal violence inflicts on the mind.
Verbal violence inflicts on the mind.
>> Verbal violence inflicts pain mentally.
Sometimes it is able to absolutely change someone\'s life.
Sometimes it is able to absolutely change someone\'s life.
>> correct
>>Sometimes, it can even change a person\'s life.
And often it is stronger than physical violence.
And often it is stronger than physical violence.
>> correct
>> And often it inflicts more severe pain then physical violence.
There are many kinds of home education in the world.
There are many kinds of home education in the world.
>> correct
Parents should think about what is a good education.
Parents should think about what is a good education.
>> correct
They should be careful not to verbalize their children.
They should be careful not to verbalize their children.
>> They should be careful about what they verbalize to their children.
I agree with the sentences that kindness is related to intelligence and sociability.
I agree with the sentences that kindness is related to intelligence and sociability.
>> correct
We can learn how to live together and how to socialize.
We can learn how to live together and how to socialize.
>> correct
Sometimes it\'s very easy to commit violence mentally to others.
Sometimes it\'s very easy to commit violence mentally to others.
>> correct
>>Sometimes it is easy to commit mental violence to others.
We can do that while we are not aware of it ourselves.
We can do that while we are not aware of it ourselves.
>> correct
>> We do it without being aware of it.
I don\'t want to do that.
I don\'t want to do that.
>> correct
So, I think that it\'s very important to look at the atmosphere when I saying.
So, I think that it\'s very important to look at the atmosphere when I saying.
>> So I think that it\'s very important to be observant while talking with others.
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