7.31 Homework :)

2014-08-04 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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If I fail to achieve my goal,I'll be frustrated at the first moment.Because it seems like that all of my effort so far turns to nothing and is no worth anymore.I'll feel helpless and not want to do any work.If this situation repeats,I won't be sure if I could achieve goals.I won't be able to get out of my head the bad thoughts.Before the situation is worse like this,however,I'll try to find out the reason why I ended up failing.If it is because my effort is not enough,the event can be stimulating and lead me to make more effort.When people face troubles in their lives,I think the most important thing is to look on the bright side.There is a quote,"Happiness is an attitude."It means happiness depends on our thoughts and how we react to obstacles.Life is like the changing weather.It's always possible that it's sunny today but rainy tomorrow.So,we'd better decide to go forward instead of giving up and stop moving.If we continue to crave goals and keep trying,we'll reach the goal ourselves

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday [이름] ^^ Wow! You wrote an inspiring composition. You are reight, we should not give up. Every mistake or problems we face, it helps us to become a better person. I hope that you will always continue studying English. Talk to you very soon! Take Care! Teacher Nina   If I fail to achieve my goal,I\'ll be frustrated at the first moment. >> If I fail to achieve my goal, I\'ll be frustrated at first. Because it seems like that all of my effort so far turns to nothing and is no worth anymore. >> Because it seems like all of my efforts turned into nothing and is no worth anymore. I\'ll feel helpless and not want to do any work. >> I feel helpless and don\'t want to do any work. If this situation repeats,I won\'t be sure if I could achieve goals. >> If this situation repeats, I won\'t be sure if I could achieve my goals. >> OR: If this happens again, I won\'t be sure if I could achieve my goals. I won\'t be able to get out of my head the bad thoughts. >> I won\'t be able to get rid of the bad thoughts in my head. Before the situation is worse like this,however,I\'ll try to find out the reason why I ended up failing. >> Before the situation worsen, I\'ll try to find out the reasin why I ended up failing. If it is because my effort is not enough,the event can be stimulating and lead me to make more effort. >> Correct >> OR: If it is because my effort is not enough, I can work harder to achieve my goal. When people face troubles in their lives,I think the most important thing is to look on the bright side. >> Correct >> OR: When people face troubles in their lives, I think the most important thing is to think positive. There is a quote,\"Happiness is an attitude.\" >> Correct >> OR: There is a quote saying, \" Happiness is an attitude\". It means happiness depends on our thoughts and how we react to obstacles. >> Correct Life is like the changing weather. >> Correct It\'s always possible that it\'s sunny today but rainy tomorrow. >> Correct So,we\'d better decide to go forward instead of giving up and stop moving. >> Correct If we continue to crave goals and keep trying,we\'ll reach the goal ourselves >> If we continue to crave goals and keep trying,we\'ll reach the goal by ourselves. >> OR: If we continue to be determined and keep trying, we\'ll reach our goals.

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