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In my opinion, skydiving cheer our up about any problem in life.
Because we need courage to do skydiving.
If we are finish perfect skydiving, we will have courage that is passion for challenging.
This is reason that i want to challenge it. It\'s same called bucket list. I feel fear about high heights at the moment.
But I\'m sure overcome the emotion. Finally I will be challenge skydiving sometime.
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Skydiving opens up your mind to possibilities. The view from above literally offers a new perspective on how you fit in with the world below. There is something profound in finding out you can overcome your fears. On every level, there is a shift in what you perceive as your limitations.
- Kristine ^^
In my opinion, skydiving cheer our up about any problem in life.
>> In my opinion, skydiving makes us feel better about any problems in life.
Because we need courage to do skydiving.
Because we need courage to do skydiving.
>> Correct.
Or >> Because skydiving requires courage.
If we are finish perfect skydiving, we will have courage that is passion for challenging.
If we are finish perfect skydiving, we will have courage that is passion for challenging.
>> We would have the confidence and desire for any challenges if we succeeded in doing skydiving,
This is reason that i want to challenge it.
This is reason that i want to challenge it.
>> This is why I want to challenge myself.
It\'s same called bucket list.
>> It\'s also known as a bucket list.
I feel fear about high heights at the moment.
>> I\'m terrified of heights now.
But I\'m sure overcome the emotion.
But I\'m sure overcome the emotion.
>> But I\'ll definitely overcome this feeling.
Finally I will be challenge skydiving sometime.
>> I will attempt skydiving someday.
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