7. 6 Homework

2018-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree? No, I don't agree with the opinion that eating meat isn't good for health. Recently, I saw a news that Korean old people are weak because they don't eat meat well. Korean are traditionally eat vegetables rather than meat. So they are not fat as Ameriacan who eat meat a lot. But they're short of essential protein in only meat. So peoople should eat not only vegetables but also meats.

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- Blair

No, I don\'t agree with the opinion that eating meat isn\'t good for health.
Recently, I saw a news that Korean old people are weak because they don\'t eat meat well. Korean are traditionally eat vegetables rather than meat. So they are not fat as Ameriacan who eat meat a lot. But they\'re short of essential protein in only meat. So peoople should eat not only vegetables but also meats.

No, I don\'t agree with the said statement, and I will discuss in the following statement/s.

Recently, I saw a news/article that old people in Korea are actually weak because they don\'t eat meat frequently. Traditionally, Koreans eat vegetables rather than meats. Resulting to this, they are not as fat as other people who eat meat a lot. So, older Koreans lack proteins which can be found in meats. In conclusion, people should eat not only vegetables but also meats and other foods so obtain the necessary nutrients our body needs.

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