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A few years ago, I went to a concert called "Open Concert". This concert is a popular concert in Korea. It was held with various genres and different singers. So many old and young people like this concert. I went to the concert with my friend and I could go there without paying. Thanks to her. I listened to music and I spent enjoyable time with my friend. If I would have a free time, I want to go to a concert by my favorite singer, Psy.

Hello [이름]!   This is better than ever. Some reminders:1. Write \'an enjoyable time\'. 2.  The conditional construction does not normally use will or would in if-clauses. EXCEPTION: If will or would express willingness, as in requests, they can be used in if-clauses. e.g. If you will come this way, the manager will see you now.I would be grateful if you would give me a little help. Teacher Venus^^   A few years ago, I went to a concert called \"Open Concert\". >>>CORRECT This concert is a popular concert in Korea. >>>CORRECT It was held with various genres and different singers. >>>CORRECT So many old and young people like this concert. >>>CORRECT I went to the concert with my friend and I could go there without paying. >>>CORRECT   Thanks to her. >>>CORRECT I listened to music and I spent enjoyable time with my friend. >>>I listened to music and I spent an enjoyable time with my friend. If I would have a free time, I want to go to a concert by my favorite singer, Psy. >>>If I have a free time, I want to go to a concert of my favorite singer, Psy.