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2016-10-14 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

If you will visit my country in spring, I recommend to visit Jeju island. While you visit there, you can see many beautiful view everywhere. You can see a big cave, you can ride a horse and you can eat many delicious local food. I went to Jeju Island for honeymoon in fall. It was my first time to visit. I want to visit there again with my children.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름],

Thank you so much for your recommendation. I will try to visit Jeju Island someday. I have heard so much about this place from a lot of people so it must be really cool to have a vacation there. Good job on your composition today. Enjoy your weekend. See you on Monday!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

If you will visit my country in spring, I recommend to visit Jeju island.

>> If you will visit my country in the Spring, I recommend for you to visit Jeju island.
While you visit there, you can see many beautiful view everywhere.

>> correct!
You can see a big cave, you can ride a horse and you can eat many delicious local food.
>> correct!

I went to Jeju Island for honeymoon in fall. It was my first time to visit.
>> I went to Jeju island during our honeymoon. It was my first time to visit there.

I want to visit there again with my children.
>> correct!

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