7.7.Fri

2023-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Joy

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7.7.Fri Q: Describe the difference in greeting your family, and greeting your friends. A: When I greet my family, I say hello and bye with my real tension. Because I’m comfortable with my family, so I can express my real emotions entirely. However, when I greet with my friends, I greet with high tension. Because greetings can deter[이름]e their emotions, and I want to be a happy virus to them. So I effort to make them happy with my high tension greeting.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름] [이름]!

Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate your efforts in doing it. By consistently practicing sentence formation your writing will flourish.

-Teacher Joy

When I greet my family, I say hello and bye with my real tension.

>> When I greet my family, I express my true emotions with a warm hello and goodbye.

 

 Because I’m comfortable with my family, so I can express my real emotions entirely.

>> Because I\'m comfortable with my family, I can fully express my genuine emotions.

 

However, when I greet with my friends, I greet with high tension.

>> However, when I greet my friends, I do so with excitement and enthusiasm.

 

 Because greetings can deter[이름]e their emotions, and I want to be a happy virus to them.

>> Because greetings can influence their emotions, and I want to be a source of happiness for them.

 

So I effort to make them happy with my high tension greeting.

>> So I make an effort to greet them with high energy and positivity to bring them joy.

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