7.7.Fri
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름] [이름]!
Thank you for doing your homework. I appreciate your efforts in doing it. By consistently practicing sentence formation your writing will flourish.
-Teacher Joy
When I greet my family, I say hello and bye with my real tension.
>> When I greet my family, I express my true emotions with a warm hello and goodbye.
Because I’m comfortable with my family, so I can express my real emotions entirely.
>> Because I\'m comfortable with my family, I can fully express my genuine emotions.
However, when I greet with my friends, I greet with high tension.
>> However, when I greet my friends, I do so with excitement and enthusiasm.
Because greetings can deter[이름]e their emotions, and I want to be a happy virus to them.
>> Because greetings can influence their emotions, and I want to be a source of happiness for them.
So I effort to make them happy with my high tension greeting.
>> So I make an effort to greet them with high energy and positivity to bring them joy.
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