7.7 Homework :)

Good day [이름]!

Wow! Thanks for a marvelous composition.

I really enjoyed reading your ideas.

I\'d like you to use proper spacing when you write your sentences.

Respect and help from the family is really important.

We should always be there for each other no matter what happens.

And for that, I am here to guide you all the way.

Don\'t give up! I know learning is a bit tricky or difficult but I know you can do it.

Talk to you soon. Take Care!

Teacher Nina

I think respect and emotional support are the most important to make a happy family.

>> I think respect and emotional support are the most important factors to make a family happy.

>> OR: Respect and emotional support are the significant factors in a happy family.

First,family has to listen carefully and respect to each other.

>> First, family has to listen carefully and respect each other.

If sometimes having different opinions,we should know it is not \'wrong\' but \'different\'.

>> Sometimes having different opinions doesn\'t mean that it is wrong, we should know that it is just different.

In a family relationship,we should not blame each other on anything wrong.

>> In a family relationship, we should not blame each other if something wrong happens.

>> OR: In terms of relationship in a family, we should not blame each other when something goes wrong.

Instead,we had better thank for anything good.

>> Instead, we should be thankful for anything that is good.

>> OR: Instead, we should be thankful for the good things.

The more we are close,the more we have to be careful of our words(e.g.,we should not use insulting words no matter how much we are angry.).

>> Correct

>> OR: The more we are close to each other, the more we have to be keen in using words. We should not use insulting or bad words no matter how angry we are.

In addition,to be a happy family,it is crucial to offer emotional support.

>> Correct

>> OR: In addition, it is difficult to offer emotional support to have a happy family.

Whenever people run into setbacks of life,they need and find emotional support.

>> Correct

Significantly,a family roles as a buffer zone to help relieve negative feelings and give new energy for overcoming them.

>> Significantly, a family role is a buffer zone that helps the members relieve negative feelings and gives out new energy to overcome obstacles.

In order to support on a sympathetic way,we should try to understand the feelings in his/her shoes.

>> In order to support in a sympathetic way, we should try to understand the feelings of that person.

>> OR: To offer support in a good way, we should always put ourselves into their shoes to understand them better.

Family can be always in others\' corner.

>> Correct

In a conclusion, it is necessary to start actions of two things above to make a happier family.

>> In conclusion, it is necessary to start with the actions stated above to have a happier family.