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2017-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

If I won the lottery, I want a lot of things. First, I would check up my body in the hospital with my family. So I would cure it with my family for our future. Second, I would travel in the world with my family for a long time. It is my dream for a long time. Finaly, I would buy a big building for my future. However I know it is just our dream.

강사 첨삭


Hello, Ms. [이름]!

There\'s no harm in dreaming. Many people think big and dream big for their future. That\'s okay. But of course, it shouldn\'t only be a dream. It should be coupled with hard work to realize those dreams. I hope you\'ll achieve at least one of your dreams. See you in class!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

If I won the lottery, I want a lot of things.

>> If I win the lottery, I want a lot of things.
 First, I would check up my body in the hospital with my family.

>> First, I would go to the hospital with my family for a check up.
 So I would cure it with my family for our future.

>> So we could immediately know if somebody is sick.
 Second, I would travel in the world with my family for a long time. It is my dream for a long time.

>> Second, I would travel the world with my family for a long time. It has been my dream for a long time.
 Finaly, I would buy a big building for my future.

>> Finally, I would buy a big building for our future.
 However, I know it is just our dream.

>> However, I know it is just a dream.

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