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2017-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

Similar incidents happended in my country. I think many young people are with a difficult situation. So, they make misjudgement to get their job. I can understand them. Some bad people use it to get money. If I can speak fluent english, I will be a English teacher and then I earn clean money.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!
Great job in making your sentences organize. You delivered your message clearly. Congratulations!
Take care!
~T. Lynn
Similar incidents happended in my country.
>> Similar incidents happened in my country.
I think many young people are with a difficult situation.
>> I think many young people are in difficult situation.
So, they make misjudgement to get their job.
>> So they make misjudgment in getting jobs.
I can understand them.
>> correct!
Some bad people use it to get money.
>> Some bad people use them to earn money.
If I can speak fluent english, I will be a English teacher and then I earn clean money.
>> If I can speak fluent English, I will be an English teacher and then I can earn clean money.

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