7

2018-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

I am not a leader now. I want to be the leader but it is not easy in Korea. I mention before, most supervisors don't want women to be a leader. I don't know why. It is a big problem in the world. A few days ago, I watched the news on the internet. Most people are paid monthly but most women are not paid enough more than men. It must change for our future and our children.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!(\",)

That\'s right Ms. [이름], a change should happen right now. But the problem is I think change is happening very slowly. We shouldn\'t lose hope though.

Take care!(\",)

~T. Lynn   

I am not a leader now.

>> correct!
 I want to be the leader but it is not easy in Korea.

>> correct!
 I mention before, most supervisors don\'t want women to be a leader.

>> correct!
 I don\'t know why.

>> correct!
 It is a big problem in the world.

>> correct!
 A few days ago, I watched the news on the internet.

>> correct!
 Most people are paid monthly but most women are not paid enough more than men.

>> Most people are paid monthly but most women are not paid as much as men.
 It must change for our future and our children.

>> correct!

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·