70. Homework

Good morning, Jason^^

Thanks for sharing your ideas!

I strongly believe that in spite of medical advances, we are still grappled with incurable diseases because of environmental factors.

I think these methods revolve around curative method more.

Q: Do you think people in your country are less healthy than they used to be?
>>CORRECT!
I don’t know how to set a standard point about this question.
>>I don’t know how to set a point about this question.
If I compare it with ancestors, this generation would be less healthy than them.

>>If I compare it with our ancestors, this generation would be less healthy than them.

 Nowadays, most of people are not able to walk a lot of miles because transportation have made our life comfortable, thus, people don\'t want to try walk even once from the end of south Korea, which is near jeju-island, to the end of other side, which is near north Korea.

>> Nowadays, most people are not able to walk a lot of miles because transportation has made our life comfortable; thus, people don\'t want to try to walk even once from the end of South Korea, which is near Jeju Island, to the end of the other side, which is near North Korea.

However, our ancestors walked from Busan to Seoul for a taking examination for a work under government even if it took about a month over the mountain and across the river.
>>However, our ancestors walked from Busan to Seoul to take an examination for work under government even if it took about a month over the mountain and across the river.
But if I compare it with the latest generation, I think this generation would be healthier than them.

>>CORRECT!

That’s because, nowadays, most of people prefer to have an individual time which is called ‘work and life balance’ instead of earning money without day off.

>>CORRECT!

So more than half people that I guess do exercise such as gym, swimming, running, jogging, Ping-Pong, tennis, or badminton.

>>So more than half of the population do exercise such as training, swimming, running, jogging, playing Ping-Pong, tennis, or badminton.

And as the technology development, programs for an exercise also have been improved.

>>And as the technology developed, programs an exercise have also been improved.

Hence, people who are workout regularly are able to strengthen their weakness point themselves.

>>Hence, people who work out regularly are able to strengthen their weakness themselves.

 Furthermore, they can make their body looks healthier.

>> Furthermore, they can make their body look healthier.
 So I think that these kinds of people are healthier than before.
>>CORRECT!
On the other hands, the advancement of science and technology has made environment to be worse.

>>On the other hand, the advancement of science and technology has made environment to be worse.

Endocrine disrupters have been increasing more and more owing to the plenty of factories.

>>Endocrine disrupters have been increasing more and more owing to plenty of factors.

Accordingly it gives people a lot of incurable disease such as a respiratory owing to the nano dust, precocious puberty due to the chemical foods, or an atopic dermatitis because of the environmental hormone.

>>Accordingly it gives people a lot of incurable disease such as a respiratory sicknesses owing to the Nano dust, precocious puberty due to the chemical in the food, or atopic dermatitis because of the environmental hormone.

In this case, people are weaker than before.
>>CORRECT!
While I was writing this, I figure we became weaker more than health.

>>While I was writing this, I figure we became weaker than healthier.

Thus, I ought to eat more vegetables and exercise increasing my immune system.

>>Thus, I ought to eat more vegetables and exercise in order to strengthen my immune system.