72. Homework

2018-03-08 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. What are the questions that you'd like to have answered? I don’t know what the questions that I have to answer are. So I am going to write my opinion regarding the latest hot issue about ‘#me too’ in Korea. They wanted to change irrational discrimination and cultures since they had rape or sexual molestation gotten from their boss or a guy who has a power such as finance, an authority over human resources, or etc… Thus, criminals that made by such as celebrities who have been working as actors, comedians, politicians, poets and movie directors have been announced by women who enrolled the activities. At the first time, I supported the activities that were made by brave women since it must to be changed. And then, I thought the activities would be helpful for the next generation and a person who has been pretending as a good person will be filtered by them owing to the activity. That’s because it worked well for the good way. However, it shows bad effect nowadays since some people use it for the things that they wanted. For example, a girl who wants to pull down a particular guy to get what she wanted such as money or getting popularity just post some stories which is not true sine it made by their imagination. Actually, he is a gay. So he showed his identity due to the showing evidence although he doesn’t want to show it officially. In my opinion, even if it has this kind of advantage, women who had bad memories gotten from a bad guy have to show their courage instead of hiding to find their rights. Furthermore, I hope some girls called flower snake in Korea, definition of flower snake is female con artist who exploits the confidence of men with sex appeal, stop making fake news because I wish it works only a good way.

강사 첨삭

Thanks for sharing your opinion, Jason^^

I am really surprised how #MeToo has been shaking the Internet and the society nowadays.

See you^^

Q. What are the questions that you\'d like to have answered?
>>CORRECT!
I don’t know what the questions that I have to answer are.

>>I don’t know what the questions that I would like to have answered are.
So I am going to write my opinion regarding the latest hot issue about ‘#me too’ in Korea.
>>So I am going to write my opinion regarding the latest hot issue about ‘#Me Too’ in Korea.
They wanted to change irrational discrimination and cultures since they had rape or sexual molestation gotten from their boss or a guy who has a power such as finance, an authority over human resources, or etc…
>>They wanted to change irrational discrimination and cultures since they were raped or sexually molested by their boss or a guy who has power such as finances, an authority over human resources, or etc.
Thus, criminals that made by such as celebrities who have been working as actors, comedians, politicians, poets and movie directors have been announced by women who enrolled the activities.
>>Thus, the names of the criminals who have been working as actors, comedians, politicians, poets and movie directors have been announced by women who they victimized.
At the first time, I supported the activities that were made by brave women since it must to be changed.

>>At the first time, I supported the activities that were made by brave women since it must be changed.

And then, I thought the activities would be helpful for the next generation and a person who has been pretending as a good person will be filtered by them owing to the activity.

>>CORRECT!

That’s because it worked well for the good way.
>>
That’s because it worked well in a good way.
However, it shows bad effect nowadays since some people use it for the things that they wanted.

>>However, it shows bad effects nowadays since some people use it for the things that they wanted.

For example, a girl who wants to pull down a particular guy to get what she wanted such as money or getting popularity just post some stories which is not true sine it made by their imagination.

>>For example, a girl who wants to pull down a particular guy to get what she wanted such as money or getting popularity just post some stories which is not true sine it is made by her imagination.

 Actually, he is a gay.

>>CORRECT!

 So he showed his identity due to the showing evidence although he doesn’t want to show it officially.
>>
 So he showed his identity by showing evidence although he doesn’t want to show it officially.
In my opinion, even if it has this kind of advantage, women who had bad memories gotten from a bad guy have to show their courage instead of hiding to find their rights.
>>
In my opinion, even if it has this kind of advantage, women who had bad memories from a bad guy have to show their courage instead of hiding to find their rights.
Furthermore, I hope some girls called flower snake in Korea, definition of flower snake is female con artist who exploits the confidence of men with sex appeal, stop making fake news because I wish it works only a good way.

>>Furthermore, I hope some girls called \"flower snake\" in Korea, female con artists who exploit the confidence of men with sex appeal,  would stop making fake news because I wish it works only a good way.

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