73. Homework

2018-03-09 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

Q. You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy? If I have a girlfriend who has been in a short time relationship with me, I would like to buy a concert ticket to see it with the girl. And ticket must be hers favorite singer or musician. If I have a girlfriend who has been in a long time relationship with me, I would like to buy a piece of jewelry like couple rings, necklace, or earrings making her happy. However, sadly, I don’t have a girlfriend. Thus, I might buy a 99.9 percent pure gold ring or diamond. That’s because I think the value of the gold will be increased and price might rise following its value growth. So I will use the gift of money as an investment technique since I don’t like to get to concert alone. Furthermore, I don’t like to wear jewelry because it makes me feel uncomfortable while I work out. While I was writing, an idea just popped up in my mind. And I have to buy a concert ticket instead of buying jewelry. And the ticket must be a famous singer and class of seat must be VIP. Accordingly, I will sell it in the black market or a NAVER blog that called '[이름]g Go Na Ra', which is for selling items to the people who wanted to get goods that is little bit cheaper than original price.; that's because most of items in the blog are second hand items. And then I will buy a tablet pc such as galaxy tap or i-pad since I really want to get it.

강사 첨삭

Sounds like the right decision, Jason^^

Investing in something rather than getting something which easily depreciates is a wise idea^^

Have a great weekend!

See you!

Q: You have received a gift of money. The money is enough to buy either a piece of jewelry you like or tickets to a concert you want to attend. Which would you buy?
>>CORRECT!
If I have a girlfriend who has been in a short time relationship with me, I would like to buy a concert ticket to see it with the girl.

>>If I have a girlfriend who has been in a relationship for a short time with me, I would like to buy a concert ticket to see it with the girl.

And ticket must be hers favorite singer or musician.
>>And the ticket must be her favorite singer or musician.
 If I have a girlfriend who has been in a long time relationship with me, I would like to buy a piece of jewelry like couple rings, necklace, or earrings making her happy.
>>
 If I have a girlfriend who has been in a long time relationship with me, I would like to buy a piece of jewelry like couple rings, necklace, or earrings to make her happy.
However, sadly, I don’t have a girlfriend.

>>CORRECT!

Thus, I might buy a 99.9 percent pure gold ring or diamond.

>>CORRECT!

That’s because I think the value of the gold will be increased and price might rise following its value growth.

>>That’s because I think the value of  gold will increase and price might rise following the growth.

So I will use the gift of money as an investment technique since I don’t like to get to concert alone.

>>So I will use the gift of money as an investment technique since I don’t like to get to the concert alone.

Furthermore, I don’t like to wear jewelry because it makes me feel uncomfortable while I work out.
>>CORRECT!

While I was writing, an idea just popped up in my mind.

>>CORRECT!
And I have to buy a concert ticket instead of buying jewelry.

>>CORRECT!

And the ticket must be a famous singer and class of seat must be VIP.

>>CORRECT!

 Accordingly, I will sell it in the black market or a NAVER blog that called \'[이름]g Go Na Ra\', which is for selling items to the people who wanted to get goods that is little bit cheaper than original price.;

>>Accordingly, I will sell it in the black market or a NAVER blog that called \'[이름]g Go Na Ra\', which is for selling items to the people who wanted to get goods that is little bit cheaper than the original price.

that\'s because most of items in the blog are second hand items.

>>That\'s because most of the items in the blog are second hand items.
 And then I will buy a tablet pc such as galaxy tap or i-pad since I really want to get it.

>>And then I will buy a tablet PC such as Galaxy Tab or iPad since I really want to get it.

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