75. Homework

2018-03-13 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

ESSAY: Boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Do you agree or disagree? I think just their appearance is influenced by their parents. That’s because only their genes come from their parents. So I guess that children are influenced by their parent who spends more time with and who talks more with. An example, my characteristic was influenced by my mother since I spend my time with her more than father. She always taught me that I have to wash dishes after eating foods, how to clean a room well, and how to cook soup, rice, and some meals. And she said that my generation might not same as before so I must know how to adjust or handle with my future wife. Hence, most of times, I clean a table and wash dishes as soon as possible after having meals. Furthermore, I try to listen carefully as possible as I can and I try to change my mistakes if I made it since I don't want to make any trouble with others. Anyways, I don't know how to make to be ending this writing. I just don’t agree boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers.

강사 첨삭

I definitely agree with you, Jason^^

We are definitely influenced by the people who we spend more time with.

No matter how we consciously think about it, it just happens spontaneously.

Have a great day!

ESSAY: Boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers. Do you agree or disagree?
>>CORRECT!
I think just their appearance is influenced by their parents.

>>CORRECT!

That’s because only their genes come from their parents.

>>CORRECT!

So I guess that children are influenced by their parent who spends more time with and who talks more with.
>>So I guess that children are influenced by their parent who they spend more time with and talk more with.
An example, my characteristic was influenced by my mother since I spend my time with her more than father.

>>As an example, my characteristic was influenced by my mother since I spend my time with her more than father.

She always taught me that I have to wash dishes after eating foods, how to clean a room well, and how to cook soup, rice, and some meals.

>>She always taught me that I have to wash dishes after eating food, how to clean a room well, and how to cook soup, rice, and some meals.
And she said that my generation might not same as before so I must know how to adjust or handle with my future wife.

>>And she said that my generation might not be the same as before, so I must know how to adjust to or handle my future wife.

Hence, most of times, I clean a table and wash dishes as soon as possible after having meals.

>>Hence, most of the times I clean a table and wash dishes as soon as possible after having meals.

Furthermore, I try to listen carefully as possible as I can and I try to change my mistakes if I made it since I don\'t want to make any trouble with others.
>>CORRECT!

Anyways, I don\'t know how to make to be ending this writing.

>> Anyways, I don\'t know how to end this writing.

I just don’t agree boys are most influenced by their fathers and girls are most influenced by their mothers.

>>CORRECT!

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