76. Homework

2018-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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ESSAY: Describe a material thing you own which is very important to you. I feel tired nowadays owing to a hard working so I bought medicine at drug store that is located in front of my house. It looks quite gorgeous due to the golden cover. On the label, they put its name ‘B-max’ and it has much kind of elements such as Vitamin C, B, Benfotiamine, Ursodeoxycholic acid and etc. When I read instruction in the box, it shows it helps a person who has muscle pain, joint pain, neuralgia, stomatitis, eye strain, physical fatigue or decreased fitness. And I have problems that eye strain, physical fatigue. Furthermore, I had gotten hard time for waking up in the morning. But after I have been taking it, I get up on time without any tired feeling. Hence, it’s important for me since it reduces my body stress well that I think. ============================================================================= ESSAY: Can people ever be truly original? I can't understand this question clearly so I am afraid of writing it. If the question means same with the sentence 'can people ever be truly inventive?', than I would say that people are creative since plenty of things that are useful for human have been made by human. And we will make more for the convenience. I have no idea for the answering it so I am going to finish writing it.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for doing this, Jason~

I am so glad you found the right supplement for you.

See you on Monday^^

ESSAY: Describe a material thing you own which is very important to you.
>>CORRECT!

I feel tired nowadays owing to a hard working so I bought medicine at drug store that is located in front of my house.

>>I feel tired nowadays owing to a hard work, so I bought medicine at a drug store that is located in front of my house.

 It looks quite gorgeous due to the golden cover.

>>CORRECT!

On the label, they put its name ‘B-max’ and it has much kind of elements such as Vitamin C, B, Benfotiamine, Ursodeoxycholic acid and etc.

>>On the label, they put its name ‘B-max’ and it has many kinds of elements such as Vitamin C, B, Benfotiamine, Ursodeoxycholic acid and etc.

When I read instruction in the box, it shows it helps a person who has muscle pain, joint pain, neuralgia, stomatitis, eye strain, physical fatigue or decreased fitness.

>>When I read the instruction on the box, it shows it helps a person who has muscle pain, joint pain, neuralgia, stomatitis, eye strain, physical fatigue or decreased fitness.

And I have problems that eye strain, physical fatigue.

>>And I have problems such as eye strain and physical fatigue.
Furthermore, I had gotten hard time for waking up in the morning.

>>Furthermore, I had a hard time waking up in the morning.
But after I have been taking it, I get up on time without any tired feeling.

>>But after taking it, I get up on time without any tired feeling.

Hence, it’s important for me since it reduces my body stress well that I think.
>>Hence, it’s important for me since it reduces my body stress better than I think. 
=============================================================================
ESSAY: Can people ever be truly original?
>>CORRECT!
I can\'t understand this question clearly so I am afraid of writing it.

>>CORRECT!
If the question means same with the sentence \'can people ever be truly inventive?\', than I would say that people are creative since plenty of things that are useful for human have been made by human.

>>If the question means same with the sentence ,\'Can people ever be truly inventive?\', then I would say that people are creative since plenty of things that are useful for humans have been made by humans.

And we will make more for the convenience.

>>As a result, it creates more convenience.

 I have no idea for the answering it so I am going to finish writing it.

>> I have no idea to answer it, so I am going to finish it.

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