78. Homework
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There was a time when plastic bags were banned in our city.
Meat, fish, and vegetables were wrapped in old newspaper.
Oh my! The letters transferred to the meat!
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ESSAY: In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in the water, so people think they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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At the first, when I had bought some goods in the markets, cashers used to pack using plastic bags which were designed for their advertisement and it was for free to the customers.
>> At the first, when I had bought some goods in the markets, cashers used to pack using plastic bags which were designed for their advertisement and it was for free for the customers.
And about more than 5 years ago, plastic bag was critical issues since it is explicitly harmful to the nature.
>>And about more than 5 years ago, using a plastic bag was a critical issue since it is explicitly harmful to the nature.
Hence, government announced a policy to reduce plastic bags.
>>Hence, the government announced a policy to reduce plastic bags.
According it, they added to the plastic bags a little amount of tax so it was not given to the customers for free anymore.
>> According to it, they added to the plastic bags a little amount of tax so it was not given to the customers for free anymore.
However, only few people had used their semi-permanent bag which is consist of fabric and most of people paid small amount money.
>> However, only few people had used their semi-permanent bag which consists of fabric and most people paid a small amount of money.
That\'s because they didn\'t want to take troublesome carrying semi-permanent bag.
>>That\'s because they didn\'t want to feel troublesome carrying a semi-permanent bag.
Thus, they had tried to change plastic bags replaced by paper bags and it worked almost same as previous rule; I am telling it didn\'t effect to the people well.
>>Thus, they had tried to change plastic bags into paper bags, and it worked almost the same as the previous rule; I am telling it didn\'t effect the people well.
From someday, markets have been using an authorized plastic bag and customers need to pay quite expensive price if they want to buy it.
>>From a certain point of time, markets have been using an authorized plastic bag and customers need to pay a quite expensive price if they want to buy it.
The bag, which costs about each 0.5 $, was authorized by government and uses for throwing garbage; it’s illegal in Korea if someone throws garbage without packing by this bag.
>> The bag, which costs about each $ 0.5, was authorized by the government and is used for throwing garbage; it’s illegal in Korea if someone throws garbage without packing by this bag.
I don’t know when Korean started using it because it has been using since when I was a child.
>> I don’t know when Koreans started using it because it has been used since I was a child.
Anyways, many people carry their semi-permanent bag since they don’t want to waste unplanned money owing to buy an authorized plastic bag.
>>Anyways, many people carry their semi-permanent bag since they don’t want to waste unplanned money owing to buying an authorized plastic bag.
Hence, I think finally the rule works well nowadays.
>>Hence, I think, finally, the rule works well nowadays.
Following my experiences, in my conclusion, the plastic bag will not be banned since it is hard to do.
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But, I think people must reduce using plastic bag due to save our earth.
>> But, I think people must reduce using plastic bags to save our earth.
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