7th, May
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ESSAY: Describe your favorite room in your home. Why is this your favorite room?
I'm living in a huge 2 stories residence in suburban area. Despite of several rooms to stay, the room i usually spend the most of time is definitely my room on second floor. One of my puppies which live in the front yard always tries to come in the house. Once she gets success, she rushes to my room without looking back. I don't know why..:( Maybe because she sniffs my cat's smell? and my siblings are also trying to come in my room. I never treated them nicely ever. But they keep coming, which makes piss me off. and this space is surrounded by all my stuffs. This makes me very comfortable since i cherish my stuffs very much. My older sister who is always trying to wear my clothes and shoes behind me says to me "You look like a dementia patient when you freak out that i used yours. Do not get attached to stuff!" I can't get how she can say like this to me. Anyway, my room is the best for me and my cat!
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Seems like you are free today. You did your previous homework.
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~Kelly^^
ESSAY: Describe your favorite room in your home. Why is this your favorite room?I\'m living in a huge 2 stories residence in suburban area.
>> I\'m living in a huge 2 story residence building in a suburban area.
Despite of several rooms to stay, the room i usually spend the most of time is definitely my room on second floor.
>> Even if there are several rooms in my house where I can stay, I usually spend most of my time in my room on the second floor.
One of my puppies which live in the front yard always tries to come in the house.
>> One of my puppies which lives in the front yard always tries to come in the house.
Once she gets success, she rushes to my room without looking back.
>> Once she gets in successfully, she rushes to my room without looking back.
I don\'t know why..:(
>> Correct.
Maybe because she sniffs my cat\'s smell? and my siblings are also trying to come in my room.
>> Maybe because she sniffs my cat\'s smell and my siblings also try to come in my room.
I never treated them nicely ever.
>> Correct.
But they keep coming, which makes piss me off.
>> But they keep coming back which pisses me off.
and this space is surrounded by all my stuffs.
>> And the is surrounded by all my stuffs.
This makes me very comfortable since i cherish my stuffs very much.
>> Correct.
My older sister who is always trying to wear my clothes and shoes behind me says to me \"You look like a dementia patient when you freak out that i used yours.
>> My older sister who always wear my clothes and shoes without asking permission says to me \"You are like a patient with dementia when you freak out that I used your clothes.
Do not get attached to stuff!\" I can\'t get how she can say like this to me.
>> Do not get attached to your stuff!\" I don\'t understand how she can say those things to me.
Anyway, my room is the best for me and my cat!
>> Anyway, my room and my cat are the best for me.
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