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2018-08-10 · 첨삭 강사 Elisha

학생이 쓴 원문

Does beauty affect one\'s success in life? Explain your answer in not more than THREE (3) sentences. TODAY CLASS In my opinion, Beauty is divided into inner and outer parts, both of which require constant management and self-discipline. Also, Beauty inside and outside not only gives you confidence, but also has a positive effect on others. That\'s why I think people with beauty can develop themselves, so they can get closer to a successful life.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Lyn! Your ideas about this topic is awesome. I think beauty is not only something our eyes can see, but it also something that our hearts can feel. =)

See you! ~Teacher Elisha

In my opinion, Beauty is divided into inner and outer parts, both of which require constant management and self-discipline.

>> In my opinion, beauty is divided into two parts; the other and the inner beauty. Both require constant self-discipline and management.
Also, Beauty inside and outside not only gives you confidence, but also has a positive effect on others.

>> Also, beauty inside and outside not only gives you confidence, but it also has a positive effect on others.
That\'s why I think people with beauty can develop themselves, so they can get closer to a successful life.

>> That\'s why I think people with beauty can develop themselves, so they can have a successful life.

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