8.10 homework

2018-08-13 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? I think that It is positive. Because Variety of experience is very important. it takes to wide thought for myself and This social experience is the base for future work. But If they make light of study it is not correct. It is just parttime job for social experience. If they make light of study for work, they can work that they dont want in the future. If They hope to work that enjoy themselves, don\'t make light of study.

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I think that It is positive. Because Variety of experience is very important.

>> I think it is positive because varieties of experiences are very important.

it takes to wide thought for myself and This social experience is the base for future work.

>> It helps to widen our thoughts about ourselves and social experiences are basis for future work.

But If they make light of study it is not correct.

>> But if they take studies lightly, then it is not correct.

It is just parttime job for social experience.

>> Correct

If they make light of study for work, they can work that they dont want in the future.

>> If they exchange studies with work, they will have a job that they don\'t want to have in the future.

If They hope to work that enjoy themselves, don\'t make light of study.

>> So if they want a job/work that they will enjoy, they should not take studies lightly.


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