8. 13 Homework

2018-08-13 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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ESSAY TYPE: Is gun control an effective way to control the crime? I don't think so. In Korea, general people can't use gun so we have few gun accidents. But there're many crime by hitting or poking by knife. I heard there're many crime about gun in America but the company of gun give much money to member of congress so American always live in the dangerosity of gun, I think gun make more crime.

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- Blair


I don\'t think so. In Korea, general people can\'t use gun so we have few gun accidents. But there\'re many crime by hitting or poking by knife. I heard there\'re many crime about gun in America but the company of gun give much money to member of congress so American always live in the dangerosity of gun, I think gun make more crime.


I don\'t think so. In Korea, general people / common citizens can\'t use guns so we have few gun accidents. But there are many crimes such as physical abuse, or multiple stab wounds. I heard there are many crimes such as shot guns in America but high profiled people pay a lot of money to gun companies so they still got access to it. In my opinion, more crimes are committed because of the easy ownership of this weapon.

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