8/16 homework
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I think I\'m a very adaptable person.
When I was a kid, our family moved a lot due to my parents\' job.
So, I had to make new friends often, and It was quite hard for me.
I remember the first day that I change to another elementary school when I was twelve years old.
It was very nervous, but I didn\'t want to be alone.
I approached classmates first, because I thought I don\'t have any other idea.
They welcomed me.
After then, I realized that most people hope the other people will come first.
When someone approaches me first, most people want to be grateful and treat me kindly.
Usually, when I meet a new person, I tend to start talking first.
Therefore, I think there are a lot of friendly and great people around me.
This is the personality trait that I most favorite.
I have other many personalities too, both advantages and weaknesses.
When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my disadvantages.
But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weakness and improve my limitation.
강사 첨삭
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I think I\'m a very adaptable person.
>> Correct
OR: I think I\'m a very flexible person.
When I was a kid, our family moved a lot due to my parents\' job.
>> Correct
OR: I think I\'m a very flexible person.
When I was a kid, our family moved a lot due to my parents\' job.
>> Correct
So, I had to make new friends often, and It was quite hard for me.
So, I had to make new friends often, and It was quite hard for me.
>> Correct
I remember the first day that I change to another elementary school when I was twelve years old.
I remember the first day that I change to another elementary school when I was twelve years old.
>> I remembered the first day that I transferred to another elementary school, I was twelve years old at that time.
It was very nervous, but I didn\'t want to be alone.
It was very nervous, but I didn\'t want to be alone.
>> I was very nervous and I didn\'t want to be alone.
I approached classmates first, because I thought I don\'t have any other idea.
I approached classmates first, because I thought I don\'t have any other idea.
>> I approached my classmates first, because I don\'t have any other idea how I can make friends.
They welcomed me.
They welcomed me.
>> Correct
After then, I realized that most people hope the other people will come first.
After then, I realized that most people hope the other people will come first.
>> After then, I realized that most people hope that other people will approach first.
When someone approaches me first, most people want to be grateful and treat me kindly.
When someone approaches me first, most people want to be grateful and treat me kindly.
>> When someone approach me first, I feel grateful because they treat me nice.
Usually, when I meet a new person, I tend to start talking first.
Usually, when I meet a new person, I tend to start talking first.
>> Correct
Therefore, I think there are a lot of friendly and great people around me.
Therefore, I think there are a lot of friendly and great people around me.
>> Correct
This is the personality trait that I most favorite.
This is the personality trait that I most favorite.
>> This is the personality trait that I most favor.
I have other many personalities too, both advantages and weaknesses.
I have other many personalities too, both advantages and weaknesses.
>> I have other personalities too, both strengths and weaknesses.
When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my disadvantages.
When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my disadvantages.
>> When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my weaknesses.
But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weakness and improve my limitation.
But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weakness and improve my limitation.
>> But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weaknesses and improve my personality.
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