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2021-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sophia

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I think I\'m a very adaptable person. When I was a kid, our family moved a lot due to my parents\' job. So, I had to make new friends often, and It was quite hard for me. I remember the first day that I change to another elementary school when I was twelve years old. It was very nervous, but I didn\'t want to be alone. I approached classmates first, because I thought I don\'t have any other idea. They welcomed me. After then, I realized that most people hope the other people will come first. When someone approaches me first, most people want to be grateful and treat me kindly. Usually, when I meet a new person, I tend to start talking first. Therefore, I think there are a lot of friendly and great people around me. This is the personality trait that I most favorite. I have other many personalities too, both advantages and weaknesses. When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my disadvantages. But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weakness and improve my limitation.

강사 첨삭

Good day, [이름]! Thank you for answering the homework today. I am glad that you make some efforts to excel in your English study. See you in our class tomorrow! :)
- Teacher Sophia


I think I\'m a very adaptable person.
>> Correct
OR: I think I\'m a very flexible person.
When I was a kid, our family moved a lot due to my parents\' job.
>> Correct
So, I had to make new friends often, and It was quite hard for me.
>> Correct
I remember the first day that I change to another elementary school when I was twelve years old.
>> I remembered the first day that I transferred to another elementary school, I was twelve years old at that time.
It was very nervous, but I didn\'t want to be alone.
>> I was very nervous and I didn\'t want to be alone.
I approached classmates first, because I thought I don\'t have any other idea.
>> I approached my classmates first, because I don\'t have any other idea how I can make friends.
They welcomed me.
>> Correct
After then, I realized that most people hope the other people will come first.
>> After then, I realized that most people hope that other people will approach first.
When someone approaches me first, most people want to be grateful and treat me kindly.
>> When someone approach me first, I feel grateful because they treat me nice.
Usually, when I meet a new person, I tend to start talking first.
>> Correct
Therefore, I think there are a lot of friendly and great people around me.
>> Correct
This is the personality trait that I most favorite.
>> This is the personality trait that I most favor.
I have other many personalities too, both advantages and weaknesses.
>> I have other personalities too, both strengths and weaknesses.
When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my disadvantages.
>> When I was young, it was quite hard to admit my weaknesses.
But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weakness and improve my limitation.
>> But, now I think that I am brave to admit my weaknesses and improve my personality.

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