8.16 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
1. It is very pleasant that we receive a salary on payday.
>>>CORRECT!
OR >>>Receiving our salary after working hard makes us feel happy.
2. However, we need to save money whenever we get a salary.
>>>CORRECT!
OR>>>However, saving some money after getting our salary is important.
3. It is very hard behavior because I have a desire to buy new things like camera lens, wireless earphone, clothes etc.
>>>This behavior is hard to control because I have a desire to buy new things like camera lens, wireless earphone, clothes etc.
4. However, if there are some distinct reasons to save money, I could suceed to save money.
>>>However, if there are some important reasons to save money, I could succeed in controlling myself.
5. In my case, I have a plan to go to Europe traveling after military service.
>>>In my case, I have a plan to travel to Europe after my military service.
6. To acheive this plan, I need to save much money of course.
>>>CORRECT!
OR >>>Saving money is important to achieve this goal.
7. So when I have a recollection of desire to buy bew things, I always control myself by imagining Europe traveling.
>>>So, when I have a desire to buy new things, I always control myself by imagining my trip to Europe.
8. I think that people who are saving money have various reasons like me.
>>>CORRECT!
OR>>>People have various reasons to save money like me.
9. Evun if it is very hard one, we will get happiness when we encounter with our saved money in the future.
>>> Even if it is hard to control our desire to spend, we will be happy with our decision to save money in the future.
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