8/16 homework

2019-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[What is the best piece of advice you have received from a family member?] When I broke up with my ex-boyfriend, I have received a lot of advice and help from my family. It was my first failure in my life. I can not understand now, but at that time, I was so sad and regret everything. Maybe I thought that love is all of me. I had drunk a lot and crying every day for a few days. My mother and younger sister have surprised me. They worried about me and told me about so many things in life. At that time, I realized that family is the most important thing in life. The family loves me no matter what. I realized that quite late because I was 25 at that time. I think love and separation is a very important experience and girls and boys should feel that in their early life. It makes us realize a lot of things and grow up to be adult.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for spending time with your homework. I really appreciate it!  ^^
Thank you for sharing a part of your life and what you have experienced in the past. Painful experiences make us grow and appreciate the people who love us!  ^^
-Teacher Jedah

When I broke up with my ex-boyfriend, I have received a lot of advice and help from my family. 
>>CORRECT
It was my first failure in my life.
>>CORRECT
I can not understand now, but at that time, I was so sad and regret everything. 
>>I can not understand now, but at that time, I was so sad and regretted everything. 
Maybe I thought that love is all of me. 
>>Maybe I thought then that love was everything. (I hope I got this one right. ^ ^)
I had drunk a lot and crying every day for a few days. 
>>I had drunk a lot and cried everyday for a few days.
My mother and younger sister have surprised me. 
>>My mother and younger sister had surprised me. 
They worried about me and told me about so many things in life.
>>CORRECT
At that time, I realized that family is the most important thing in life. 
>>CORRECT
The family loves me no matter what. 
>>CORRECT
I realized that quite late because I was 25 at that time. 
>>CORRECT
I think love and separation is a very important experience and girls and boys should feel that in their early life. 
>>I think love and separation are very important experiences and girls and boys should feel that in their early life. 
It makes us realize a lot of things and grow up to be adult.
>>It makes us realize a lot of things and grow up to be mature adults.

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