8/19 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Q) How could public transport in your city be improved?
A) Well, there\'s a department responsible for that, but I\'d like to see some changes to make public transportation more easy for citizens to use. For example, I think make a short intervals bus and subways or expanding bus only lanes. If more people use public transportation, traffic congestion will decrease.
강사 첨삭
Hi Mr. [이름] you did a great job expressing thoughtful ideas about how to improve public transportation. I can see you care about making. Life easier for citizens, and your suggestions like shorter bus intervals and bus-only lanes are very practical. These kinds of details make your writing more convincing and meaningful. I only adjusted a few grammar points to make your sentences flow more naturally. For example, “more easy” should be “easier,” and the second sentence needed smoother wording to explain your ideas more clearly. Overall, your response shows strong critical thinking and a genuine concern for the community, which is wonderful to read.
~ T. Lia
Well, there\'s a department responsible for that, but I\'d like to see some changes to make public transportation more easy for citizens to use.
>> Well, there\'s a department responsible for that, but I\'d like to see some changes to make public transportation easier for citizens to use.
For example, I think make a short intervals bus and subways or expanding bus only lanes.
>> For example, I think buses and subways should run at shorter intervals, or bus-only lanes should be expanded.
If more people use public transportation, traffic congestion will decrease.
>> CORRECT
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