8/19 homework

2019-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[What is the biggest accomplishment in your personal life?] I think my biggest accomplishment in my personal life is getting married to my husband. Before I got married, I thought the biggest task in life is marriage. But, I realized that marriage is relatively smaller than I expected. The bigger event and choice is waiting for me after getting married. So, I think marriage is a turning point or starting point to the next step in my life. I am very settled and feel warm with my husband. It makes me more concentrate to work also. So I think everything about me starts at home. Peace of mind is very important to live life. This is my thought about the biggest accomplishment until now. I am still young, so maybe the depth or degrees of accomplishment will be changed. I want to feel and realize a lot of things in life. And I want to keel at a book in my old age.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
I\'m happy to know that you feel accomplished with your marriage. I hope that your married life will continue to prosper and grow more!  ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

I think my biggest accomplishment in my personal life is getting married to my husband. 
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Before I got married, I thought the biggest task in life is marriage. 
>>CORRECT
But, I realized that marriage is relatively smaller than I expected. 
>>CORRECT
The bigger event and choice is waiting for me after getting married. 
>>CORRECT
So, I think marriage is a turning point or starting point to the next step in my life. 
>>CORRECT
I am very settled and feel warm with my husband. 
>>CORRECT
It makes me more concentrate to work also. 
>>It also makes me focus with my work more.
So I think everything about me starts at home.
>>CORRECT
Peace of mind is very important to live life. 
>>CORRECT
This is my thought about the biggest accomplishment until now. 
>>CORRECT
I am still young, so maybe the depth or degrees of accomplishment will be changed. 
>>CORRECT
I want to feel and realize a lot of things in life. 
>>CORRECT
And I want to keel at a book in my old age.
>>And I want to write a book in my old age. (I\'m not sure if I got this right, but the only idiom I know about using the word \"keel\" is \"on an even keel\", which means to find a state of balance. ^ ^ )

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