8/21 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[What was your biggest fear when you were young?]
When I was young, I was scared of the ghost.
When I saw a horror movie or TV program, I never slept in bed.
Finally, I went to my parents\' bed and slept there.
I don\'t know why I was so scared of the ghost, but I think it was baseless fear.
And then, when I was a high school student, I was afraid to fall asleep.
At that time, the amount of studying was so much to go to enter high-grade university.
Although I come back home from school at about midnight, I often turn on the computer to take a lecture on internet.
I think I was under an obsession that I should study as much as possible.
It made me tired and it was shown in my mental and physical state.
I had many chronic sicknesses such as headache and constipation.
But curiously, the sicknesses were disappeared after graduating high school.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for your thoughts on this one. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
Thank goodness you were able to overcome those illnesses, I think it goes with stress too. But I wonder, are you still afraid of ghosts up to this day? ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
When I was young, I was scared of the ghost.
>>When I was young, I was scared of ghosts.
When I saw a horror movie or TV program, I never slept in bed.
When I saw a horror movie or TV program, I never slept in bed.
>>After watching a horror movie or TV program, I would not like to sleep in my bed.
Finally, I went to my parents\' bed and slept there.
Finally, I went to my parents\' bed and slept there.
>>I would sleep in my parents bed instead.
I don\'t know why I was so scared of the ghost, but I think it was baseless fear.
I don\'t know why I was so scared of the ghost, but I think it was baseless fear.
>>I don\'t know why I was so scared of ghosts, but I think it was baseless fear.
And then, when I was a high school student, I was afraid to fall asleep.
And then, when I was a high school student, I was afraid to fall asleep.
>>CORRECT
At that time, the amount of studying was so much to go to enter high-grade university.
At that time, the amount of studying was so much to go to enter high-grade university.
>>At that time, the amount of studying was so much just so you can enter a high-grade university.
Although I come back home from school at about midnight, I often turn on the computer to take a lecture on internet.
Although I come back home from school at about midnight, I often turn on the computer to take a lecture on internet.
>>Even if I already came home late from school at about midnight, I still often turned on the computer to take a lecture on the internet.
I think I was under an obsession that I should study as much as possible.
I think I was under an obsession that I should study as much as possible.
>>CORRECT
It made me tired and it was shown in my mental and physical state.
It made me tired and it was shown in my mental and physical state.
>>It made me tired and it showed in my mental and physical state.
I had many chronic sicknesses such as headache and constipation.
I had many chronic sicknesses such as headache and constipation.
>>CORRECT (or diseases)
But curiously, the sicknesses were disappeared after graduating high school.
But curiously, the sicknesses were disappeared after graduating high school.
>>Fortunately but curiously, those illnesses disappeared after I graduated high school.
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