8/22 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
What is an unforgettable place you\'ve been to?
Austrailia is an unforgettable place I`ve been to.
About 9 years ago, I had been a long trip to austrailia for 3 weeks.
I visited several cities like Sidney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Goldcoast.
They had awesome natural environment.
I felt refreshed with the great views and breathing fresh air.
Also, Austrailian was very kind to me and I was impressed to someone who helped me to carry a heavy luggage at the train station.
I have had a good memory with Austrailia.
I really want to go there once more.
강사 첨삭
Good morning once again, [이름]!
It\'s is great to see you here on the Power English Composition Page! You speak English and write very well too. I am so glad to read this composition today. Australia is truly an amazing country as you had descibed it below. Not only the places, the peopleas well are remarkable. Hence, you ought to visit the other scenery or places you have not been able to discover yet in time in that country.
Here on your answer, your introduction, body, and conclusion were organized perfectly. Your examples were vivid as well as the others details of the places you went to. I have a few grammar suggestions and they were underlined for your convenience. Kindly read them carefully. Keep writing!
See you in class!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
Or: Australia
About 9 years ago, I had been a long trip to austrailia for 3 weeks.
About 9 years ago, I had been a long trip to austrailia for 3 weeks.
>> About 9 years ago, I had been to a long trip to Australia for 3 weeks.
I visited several cities like Sidney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Goldcoast.
>> Correct!
They had awesome natural environment.
>> Correct!
Or: They have awesome natural environment.
I felt refreshed with the great views and breathing fresh air.
>> Correct!
Also, Austrailian was very kind to me and I was impressed to someone who helped me to carry a heavy luggage at the train station.
>> Also, an Austrailians was very kind to me and I was impressed by someone who helped me carry a heavy luggage at the train station.
I have had a good memory with Austrailia.
>> Correct!
Or: I had good memories of Australia.
I really want to go there once more.
>> Correct!
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