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2017-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Should students be allowed to have cell phones in elementary and high schools? Why or why not? <My answer> I think students should be allowed to have cell phones in elementary and high schools. Because,many students call to our parents when our class. Second,I think we can't know when are we happen an urgent business. Finally,I think it's okay when we turned off cell phones. So,I think students should be allowed to have cell phones in elementary and high schools.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

Good evening! ^^


Thank you for sharing your ideas about this topic. :)

I do agree with you, however, if they have cell phones,

they also have to responsible to use it in the right time and not in classes. :)


Teacher Glenda


Should students be allowed to have cell phones in elementary and high
schools? Why or why not?
< My answer>
I think students should be allowed to have cell phones in elementary and high schools.

>> Correct
 Because,many students call to our parents when our class.

>> Because many students need to call their parents after classes.
 Second,I think we can\'t know when are we happen an urgent business.

>> Second, I think we won\'t know if something urgent happens.
 Finally,I think it\'s okay when we turned off cell phones.

>> Finally, I think it\'s okay for us to have cellphone but we need to turn it off during classes.
 So,I think students should be allowed to have cell phones in elementary and high schools.

>> Correct

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