8/29 homework
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[Over the last few decades, the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problem has this caused?]
I think the most serious problem is making a criterion about beauty.
Every woman has a different face and body shape.
Although we buy cloths according to official size, it is just for the convenient production of cloths.
Beauty is a very abstract idea.
So, you can think differently about beauty from person to person.
Someone having very sharp jawline wants to have round jawline.
An extremely skinny woman has stress about that, but a chubby woman is jealous of her.
In Korea, we have a new modern word like \"Gangnam beauty\".
It means we can distinguish the women who have plastic surgery in Gangnam because the face style is very similar to each other.
There are a lot of cosmetic clinics in Gangnam, we can easily see the advertisements about them.
We are losing the beauty variation.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework and sending it on time. I appreciate your effort! ^ ^
Like what they say; \"beauty is in the eyes of the beholder\". People see beauty in different ways. It may be ordinary to some but to others it may seem extra ordinary. But, for me, what use is physical beauty if you are not graceful with your actions, or that you have a very bad attitude. ^ ^
And, by the way; your writing skills have improved a lot! Way to go! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
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Every woman has a different face and body shape.
Every woman has a different face and body shape.
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Although we buy cloths according to official size, it is just for the convenient production of cloths.
Although we buy cloths according to official size, it is just for the convenient production of cloths.
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Beauty is a very abstract idea.
Beauty is a very abstract idea.
>>CORRECT
So, you can think differently about beauty from person to person.
So, you can think differently about beauty from person to person.
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Someone having very sharp jawline wants to have round jawline.
Someone having very sharp jawline wants to have round jawline.
>>CORRECT
An extremely skinny woman has stress about that, but a chubby woman is jealous of her.
An extremely skinny woman has stress about that, but a chubby woman is jealous of her.
>>CORRECT
In Korea, we have a new modern word like \"Gangnam beauty\".
In Korea, we have a new modern word like \"Gangnam beauty\".
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It means we can distinguish the women who have plastic surgery in Gangnam because the face style is very similar to each other.
It means we can distinguish the women who have plastic surgery in Gangnam because the face style is very similar to each other.
>>It means we can distinguish the women who had cosmetic surgeries in Gangnam because the facial features are very similar to each other.
There are a lot of cosmetic clinics in Gangnam, we can easily see the advertisements about them.
There are a lot of cosmetic clinics in Gangnam, we can easily see the advertisements about them.
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We are losing the beauty variation.
We are losing the beauty variation.
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