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2019-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[What qualities of your husband attracted you most?] My husband is always very calm. While I was emotional, he was logical. I was a girl who always smile and is nice to people. However, I had a lot of concerns and was struggling almost always to do something. When I met him, he was the opposite person with me. I think it was the biggest quality of my husband attracted me. I thought I am a person like a wave, he is like a lake that always calm. So, I felt something comfortable emotion with him. My features are changed with him. I think that we seem to find the balance between calm and struggle. We need both of them in life. But, I think we should have emotional peace and balance. So, I think that the best mate is a person who I want to be like him/her. To me, the mate is my husband. Sometimes the difference between us makes a conflict. But, it also the way we are trying to find a balance.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework and sending them on time!  ^^ I appreciate it a lot!  ^^
Thank you for sharing your thoughts here. I\'m not sure, but I think the saying still holds true; \"opposites attract\". Me and my husband are totally different people. I guess, we have little in common, but still, we get along well. Although we do have a lot of differences, we don\'t impose or insist that we become like each other, instead we focus on our strengths and we respect our differences. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah

My husband is always very calm. 
>>CORRECT
While I was emotional, he was logical.
>>While I am emotional, he is logical. 
I was a girl who always smile and is nice to people.
>>I was a girl who always smiles and was nice to people. 
However, I had a lot of concerns and was struggling almost always to do something. 
>>CORRECT
When I met him, he was the opposite person with me. 
>>When I met him, he was my total opposite.
I think it was the biggest quality of my husband attracted me.
>>I think that is his best quality that I got attracted with. 
I thought I am a person like a wave, he is like a lake that always calm.
>>I thought I am a person that is like a wave, he is like a lake that is always calm.
So, I felt something comfortable emotion with him. 
>>So, I felt a really good and comfortable feeling when I am with him.
My features are changed with him. 
>>My character changed because of him.
I think that we seem to find the balance between calm and struggle.
>>I think that we seem to find the balance between calm and unrest. 
We need both of them in life. 
>>CORRECT
But, I think we should have emotional peace and balance.
>>CORRECT
So, I think that the best mate is a person who I want to be like him/her.
>>So I think that the best mate is the person you want to be. 
To me, the mate is my husband. 
>>CORRECT
Sometimes the difference between us makes a conflict.
>>CORRECT
But, it also the way we are trying to find a balance.
>>But, it\'s also a way where we can find balance.

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