8/31 Homework
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I am very concerned about something.
So whenever I tell someone a difficult offer, I tend to think about it for a long time to find proper words and method to convey my opinion.
One of my friends says that it is my strength to think and act carefully, but I excessively hesistate to say something to be refused.
How about look around help directly to someone?
Many people will help you in a friendly way.
When looking back on the past, I gave an offer to someone after a long consideration, but people were willing to recieve an offer many times.
After I recieved that advise, I have tried to think more simple than before.
강사 첨삭
1. I am very concerned about something.
>>CORRECT
OR>>There is something that concerns me.
2. So whenever I tell someone a difficult offer, I tend to think about it for a long time to find proper words and method to convey my opinion.
>>Whenever I tell someone a difficult offer, I tend to think about it for a long time to find the right words and the ways to convey my opinion effectively.
3. One of my friends says that it is my strength to think and act carefully, but I excessively hesistate to say something to be refused.
>>One of my friends says that it is my strength to think and act carefully, but I excessively hesitate to say something because I\'m afraid that I might get rejected.
4. How about look around help directly to someone?
>>How about look for help directly from someone?
5. Many people will help you in a friendly way.
>>CORRECT
OR>>There are a lot of people who are willing to help you in a friendly way.
6. When looking back on the past, I gave an offer to someone after a long consideration, but people were willing to recieve an offer many times.
>>When looking back on the past, I gave an offer to someone after long consideration, and people were willing to receive offers many times.
7. After I recieved that advise, I have tried to think more simple than before.
>>After I received that advice, I have tried to think more simple than before.
I\'m glad you were able to overcome it.
- T. Melody ^^
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