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Farming is a fundamental industry.
It offers very basic things for our life.
So, it\'s a very important industry and behavior, but people think it\'s not important than other industries now.
The number of farmers decreasing rapidly, and robots or high-technology is substituting them.
Farming requires long-term efforts and trying.
We should care for plants every day and every time.
Someones say farming is unnatural because ancient people lived in a hunter-gatherer lifestyle, not farming lifestyle.
However, we can not return to a hunter-gatherer lifestyle.
If someone invents new food or medicine substitutes normal foods, in the future, agriculture may not be necessary.
However, the amount of food is not enough in the world and the reduction rate becomes faster.
Foods are very important as water or air.
We can\'t survive without food.
We don\'t know how important because we eat something every day and it is routine.
We should realize that.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
I totally agree with your idea that we don\'t place much value to the food we are eating and their sources because we still have something to eat and it is a routine, but once we lose much of it and farming is replaced, then I guess people will panic and worry about it, so we should start realizing that now and be more considerate to our farmers. ^ ^
-Rachel
Farming is a fundamental industry. It offers very basic things for our life.
>> correct
So, it\'s a very important industry and behavior, but people think it\'s not important than other industries now.
So, it\'s a very important industry and behavior, but people think it\'s not important than other industries now.
>> So it\'s a very important industry and sector, but people think that it\'s less important than the other industries.
The number of farmers decreasing rapidly, and robots or high-technology is substituting them.
The number of farmers decreasing rapidly, and robots or high-technology is substituting them.
>> The number of farmers is decreasing rapidly and robots or high-technology is substituting them.
Farming requires long-term efforts and trying. We should care for plants every day and every time.
Farming requires long-term efforts and trying. We should care for plants every day and every time.
>> correct ( awesome sentences)
Someones say farming is unnatural because ancient people lived in a hunter-gatherer lifestyle, not farming lifestyle.
Someones say farming is unnatural because ancient people lived in a hunter-gatherer lifestyle, not farming lifestyle.
>> Some say farming is unnatural because ancient people lived as hunters and gatherer and not farmers.
However, we can not return to a hunter-gatherer lifestyle.
However, we can not return to a hunter-gatherer lifestyle.
>> correct
If someone invents new food or medicine substitutes normal foods, in the future, agriculture may not be necessary.
If someone invents new food or medicine substitutes normal foods, in the future, agriculture may not be necessary.
>> If someone invents new food or medicine substitutes for normal foods in the future, agriculture may not be necessary.
However, the amount of food is not enough in the world and the reduction rate becomes faster.
However, the amount of food is not enough in the world and the reduction rate becomes faster.
>> correct
Foods are very important as water or air. We can\'t survive without food.
>> correct
We don\'t know how important because we eat something every day and it is routine.
Foods are very important as water or air. We can\'t survive without food.
>> correct
We don\'t know how important because we eat something every day and it is routine.
>> We don\'t appreciate its importance because we eat everyday and it is a routine.
We should realize that.
We should realize that.
>> correct
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