8/7 homework

2019-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[Who is the greatest person you have ever met?] When I was in Japan, she was my colleague at Kyoto University and Japanese. She was very small enough to look like a child. So, when I first met her I was very surprised. She is very smart and kind. Although she got married a long time ago, she doesn\'t want to have a baby. In the meantime, her mind was changed and she became pregnant. After pregnancy, her life did not change. However, since her baby was born, her lifestyle has changed a lot. She got the official vacation for three months and go back home very early even after coming back to school. I think she lost her career in the academic field. And it\'s very common in Asian culture. But it was my illusion. She published a great paper while her baby was asleep. It was a little slower than her life before got the baby, however, she was advancing. I realized that if I have passion, I can get both my family and career at the same time.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thank you for spending a little of your time with your homework. I really appreciate it!  ^^
Thank you for sharing. Now I remember, I actually gave you this homework many months ago. I remember now this person you admire most! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah 

When I was in Japan, she was my colleague at Kyoto University and Japanese. 
>>When I was in Japan, I had a Japanese colleague at Kyoto University. 
She was very small enough to look like a child. 
>>Correct
So, when I first met her I was very surprised. 
>>Correct
She is very smart and kind.
>>Correct
Although she got married a long time ago, she doesn\'t want to have a baby.
>>Correct
In the meantime, her mind was changed and she became pregnant.
>>But, during the course of time, her mind was changed and she became pregnant.
After pregnancy, her life did not change. 
>>Correct 
However, since her baby was born, her lifestyle has changed a lot.
>>Correct
She got the official vacation for three months and go back home very early even after coming back to school. 
>>She got an official leave for three months and goes back home very early even after coming back to work. 
I think she lost her career in the academic field.
>>Correct
And it\'s very common in Asian culture.
>>Correct 
But it was my illusion.
>>But, it was just what I thought.
She published a great paper while her baby was asleep.
>>While her baby sleeps, she tries to finish he paperwork and was able to published it after.
It was a little slower than her life before got the baby, however, she was advancing.
>>It was a little slower than her life before she had her baby, however, she was still moving forward.
I realized that if I have passion, I can get both my family and career at the same time.
>>Correct

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