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2017-10-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kathy

학생이 쓴 원문

I visited in Japan with my family 5 years ago. It was my first time. I was very scared about flying airplan. There were many temples and tall buildings like my country. But most street clearned more than Korea. I can't forget Japanese people because they were very kind. I also could eat sushi which is my favorite food. I miss sushi which is very delicious because Japanese sushi is very yummy more than Korean sushi. I want to visit Japan again.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],
I do appreciate you sending your homework to me. Your sentences were very good but we need to correct some of your grammars and sentence structures. I do hope that you do not take these corrections as an offense but take these corrections as an opportunity for you to improve your English more ^_^
~~Teacher Kathy
Here are my corrections for you:
I visited in Japan with my family 5 years ago.
>> My family and I visited Japan 5 years ago.
It was my first time.
>> Correct!
OR:
>> It was my first time there.
I was very scared about flying airplan.
>> I was scared of the airplane.
There were many temples and tall buildings like my country.
>> There were many temples and tall buildings just like in my country.
But most street clearned more than Korea.
>> But the streets are cleaner than the streets in Korea.
I can\'t forget Japanese people because they were very kind.
>> I will never forget Japanese people because they were very kind.
I also could eat sushi which is my favorite food.
>> I also ate sushi, which is my favorite food.
I miss sushi which is very delicious because Japanese sushi is very yummy more than Korean sushi.
>> I miss eating Japanese sushi. The taste is way better than the Korean sushi.
I want to visit Japan again.
>> Correct!
OR:
>> I wish to visit Japan again.

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