8/8 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[What is the most important thing to succeed in life?]
I think the most important thing for a successful life is rid of loneliness.
I think everyone can feel the loneliness often in life.
Even if we have a family or a good husband or a lot of money, we can feel the emotion.
Maybe it comes from a lack of self-esteem.
It can not be covered by material things such as money, shopping, or game.
I heard that the happiest country is not a rich country.
It is a very poor and small country in Africa.
We should think about this. me too.
Rich men who I can not imagine how much money they have also maybe have worries.
Whether or not I succeded in life probably determines in my mind.
I am feeling passion right now during wiring this.
Keep it up!
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for spending a little of your time with your homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^^
Thank you for your thoughts here too! Success is so generic that there is no definite definition for it. I guess it all depends on the person. But one thing for sure though, if you want to achieve success you have to persevere and always have a positive attitude about everything. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>I think the most important thing for a successful life is to rid oneself of loneliness.
I think everyone can feel the loneliness often in life.
I think everyone can feel the loneliness often in life.
>>I think everyone often feels the loneliness in their lives.
Even if we have a family or a good husband or a lot of money, we can feel the emotion.
Even if we have a family or a good husband or a lot of money, we can feel the emotion.
>>Correct
Maybe it comes from a lack of self-esteem.
Maybe it comes from a lack of self-esteem.
>>Correct
It can not be covered by material things such as money, shopping, or game.
It can not be covered by material things such as money, shopping, or game.
>>Correct
I heard that the happiest country is not a rich country.
I heard that the happiest country is not a rich country.
>>Correct
It is a very poor and small country in Africa.
It is a very poor and small country in Africa.
>>Correct
We should think about this. me too.
We should think about this. me too.
>>We should think about this.
Rich men who I can not imagine how much money they have also maybe have worries.
Rich men who I can not imagine how much money they have also maybe have worries.
>>Correct
Whether or not I succeded in life probably determines in my mind.
Whether or not I succeded in life probably determines in my mind.
>>Whether or not I succeeded in life still depends on what I think of what success is.
I am feeling passion right now during wiring this.
I am feeling passion right now during wiring this.
>>I am feeling passionate right now while I\'m writing this.
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