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2018-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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I live on the first floor of the apartment. There are 3 bedrooms, 2 bathrooms, a kitchen and a big living room. The two bedrooms are my children's room. The last bedroom is mine. I share the room with husband. My room is always dark because of the small window. I want to have a big window. I don't have bed in my room because sometimes my children sleep with me. We usually sleep in the living room. We watch drama when we sleep. I have been living here for 16 years. I don't want to move to another place.

강사 첨삭

I live on the first floor of the apartment. 

>> Correct
 There are 3 bedrooms, 2 bathrooms, a kitchen and a big living room.

>> Correct

or

>> We have 3 bedrooms, 2 bathrooms, a kitchen and a big living room.
 The two bedrooms are my children\'s room.

>> Correct
 The last bedroom is mine. 

>> Correct

or

>> The last bedroom is for me and my husband.
 I share the room with husband. 

>> I share the room with my husband.
 My room is always dark because of the small window.

>> Our room is always dark because it only has a small window.
 I want to have a big window.

>> Correct

or

>> So, I want to have a bigger window.
 I don\'t have bed in my room because sometimes my children sleep with me.

>> We don\'t have a bed in our room because sometimes my children sleep with us.
 We usually sleep in the living room. 

>> Or we usually sleep in the living room.
 We watch drama when we sleep. 

>> We watch drama as we sleep.
 I have been living here for 16 years. 

>> Correct
 I don\'t want to move to another place.

>> Correct


I live on the first floor of the apartment. We have 3 bedrooms, 2 bathrooms, a kitchen and a big living room. The two bedrooms are my children\'s room and the last bedroom is for me and my husband. Our room is always dark because it only has a small window. So, I want to have a bigger window.  We don\'t have a bed in our room because sometimes my children sleep with us. Or we usually sleep in the living room because we watch drama as we sleep.  I have been living here for 16 years now and  I don\'t want to move to another place.

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