80. Homework

2018-03-22 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

학생이 쓴 원문

ESSAY: Many people prefer to spend money and save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development? I have heard when a woman gets stressed, she goes to shopping to buy something such as dress, hills, lipsticks and foods. At that time, she feels relaxed although she knows she will receive a huge amount bills after few days later. So, some people spend money instead of saving it since they want to relief their hardship. However, others want to save money to prevent unexpected situations which are needed to spend money a lot. That’s because they think saving money is better than paying back interest to the bank. For example, a person who wants to buy a super car buys it using credit card even if he doesn’t have enough finances to buy it. That’s because he is kind of a type called YOLO which means Your Only Live Once. Thus, he just chooses to buy it first for enjoying his life. And other type, they just choose to save money until they gather enough to buy it. that's because they think that paying back interest to the bank is useless and they don't need to buy a super car just now. In conclusion, I can’t choose that spending money works positively or negatively since I think these situations depend on their characteristic.

강사 첨삭

Very well said, Jason^^

I think I remember what my mother told me.

She said that I was not born rich, so I should not act as if I am, ha! ha!

See you tomorrow!

ESSAY: Many people prefer to spend money and save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?
>>CORRECT!
I have heard when a woman gets stressed, she goes to shopping to buy something such as dress, hills, lipsticks and foods.

>>I have heard when a woman gets stressed, she goes shopping to buy something such as dress, heels, lipsticks and food.

At that time, she feels relaxed although she knows she will receive a huge amount bills after few days later.

>>At that time, she feels relaxed although she knows she will receive a huge amount of bills after a few days.

So, some people spend money instead of saving it since they want to relief their hardship.
>>So, some people spend money instead of saving it since they want to relieve their hardship.
However, others want to save money to prevent unexpected situations which are needed to spend money a lot.

>>However, others want to save money to prevent unexpected situations which are need a lot of money.

That’s because they think saving money is better than paying back interest to the bank.
>>CORRECT!
For example, a person who wants to buy a super car buys it using credit card even if he doesn’t have enough finances to buy it.

>>CORRECT!

That’s because he is kind of a type called YOLO which means Your Only Live Once.

>>That’s because he is kind of a type called YOLO which means You Only Live Once.

Thus, he just chooses to buy it first for enjoying his life.

>>Thus, he just chooses to buy it first to enjoy his life.
And other type, they just choose to save money until they gather enough to buy it.

>> And the other type, they just choose to save money until they gather enough to buy it.

that\'s because they think that paying back interest to the bank is useless and they don\'t need to buy a super car just now.
>>That\'s because they think that paying back the interest to the bank is useless and they don\'t need to buy a super car just now.
In conclusion, I can’t choose that spending money works positively or negatively since I think these situations depend on their characteristic.

>>CORRECT!

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