9/10 homework
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[Should a conflict be solved straightaway or when we calm down?]
When I was younger than now, it\'s very difficult to hold the conflict until calm down.
I want to solve as soon as possible, and often it makes a bigger conflict because I couldn\'t think rationally.
It was a common way between me and boyfriend.
But, now I think it\'s better to talk and solve when we calm down when we faced the conflict.
Especially, when a conflict occurred, often we are very nervous and excited.
It obstructs to think rationally, it makes me think that he/she was wrong.
At that time, stop the argument or conversation and do just my work unrelated with the conflict.
I will forget it soon.
If I calm down for a while, I can feel many emotions and understand his/her situation or attitude.
At that time, I can logically talk about my feeling or thoughts about the conflict and can apologize to him/her my action.
The solution to the conflict starts from this point.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for accomplishing your homework right away! I appreciate the effort! ^ ^
I totally agree with you. You can never resolve a conflict if both parties are reactive. You know what they say; \"learn to respond and not to react!\" ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>When I was younger, it\'s very difficult for me to hold the conflict until I have calmed down.
I want to solve as soon as possible, and often it makes a bigger conflict because I couldn\'t think rationally.
I want to solve as soon as possible, and often it makes a bigger conflict because I couldn\'t think rationally.
>>CORRECT
It was a common way between me and boyfriend.
It was a common way between me and boyfriend.
>>It was a common thing between me and my boyfriend.
But, now I think it\'s better to talk and solve when we calm down when we faced the conflict.
But, now I think it\'s better to talk and solve when we calm down when we faced the conflict.
>>But now, I think it\'s better to talk and solve a conflict when we have both calmed down.
Especially, when a conflict occurred, often we are very nervous and excited.
>>When a conflict arises, often, we tend to be very nervous and agitated.
It obstructs to think rationally, it makes me think that he/she was wrong.
It obstructs to think rationally, it makes me think that he/she was wrong.
>>It hinders us to think rationally and each person would think that he/she is right and the other person is wrong.
At that time, stop the argument or conversation and do just my work unrelated with the conflict.
At that time, stop the argument or conversation and do just my work unrelated with the conflict.
>>I suggest that when that happens, we must stop the argument and do other things unrelated to the conflict.
I will forget it soon.
I will forget it soon.
>>CORRECT
If I calm down for a while, I can feel many emotions and understand his/her situation or attitude.
>>CORRECT
At that time, I can logically talk about my feeling or thoughts about the conflict and can apologize to him/her my action.
At that time, I can logically talk about my feeling or thoughts about the conflict and can apologize to him/her my action.
>>Doing so will allow me to think and talk rationally and can apologize if I\'m the one at fault.
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