9.13 HOMEWORK
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<Answer the question using complete sentences not more than 10.>
*Question: Do you think sending your loved ones to nursing homes is a kind of abandonment? Why?
I think it's not a kind of abandonment. I have reasons to think it's not abandonment. First, Everyone have works to have to do. If the loved one is very sick or in the conditions which demand big help for some reasons, We can't take care of the loved one. We can't throw away all our works and take care of him or her all the time. It is impossible. Second, the loved one may not want to be a hard existance to her or his family. An expert can be more good at taking care of our loved one. We cab visit him or her any time we are not in work.
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>> I think sending our loved ones to nursing home is not a kind of abandonment.
I have reasons to think it\'s not abandonment.
>> I have my own reasons why did I say this.
First, Everyone have works to have to do.
>> First, everyone has a work to do.
If the loved one is very sick or in the conditions which demand big help for some reasons, We can\'t take care of the loved one.
>> If our loved one is sick or in a situation that demands a serious help from us then we can\'t just take care of him.
We can\'t throw away all our works and take care of him or her all the time.
>> We can\'t just leave our work and take care of him all the time.
It is impossible.
>> Correct!
Second, the loved one may not want to be a hard existance to her or his family.
>> Second, our loved one might not wants us to be in a hard situation because of him.
An expert can be more good at taking care of our loved one.
>> We should bring them somewhere where there is an expert who can take care of him better.
We cab visit him or her any time we are not in work.
>> We can go and visit him anytime when we don\'t have work.
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