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2020-09-16 · 첨삭 강사 Gabby

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My favorite activities with parents s going camping. I love camping because I can see many stars and drink fresh air when I go camping. I also like the fireplace that we make when going to camping. It is great to see the fire and think nothing. It helps me relax from all the stress I get in my real life. Another advantage of camping is that I can experience living near the nature. Since I live in a city, I don\'t get much opportunity to feel the mountains and seas. However, when I go camping, I can see mountains as I wake up, and see the seas. I love the atmosphere of nature in morning, which makes my favorite activities with my parents camping.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]. Great work! Keep it up! :)
-T.Gabby :)
My favorite activities with parents s going camping. 
>> My favorite activity with my parents is camping. 
I love camping because I can see many stars and drink fresh air when I go camping. 
>> Correct.
I also like the fireplace that we make when going to camping. 
>> I also like the fireplace that we make when we go camping. 
It is great to see the fire and think nothing. 
>> Correct.
It helps me relax from all the stress I get in my real life. 
>> Correct.
Another advantage of camping is that I can experience living near the nature. 
>> Correct.
Since I live in a city, I don\'t get much opportunity to feel the mountains and seas. 
>> Correct.
However, when I go camping, I can see mountains as I wake up, and see the seas. 
>> Correct.
I love the atmosphere of nature in morning, which makes my favorite activities with my parents camping.
>> Correct.

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