9/16 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Development of many transportations gives us great freedom of movement.
We can go anywhere in Korea, even around the whole world.
But if there were no cars, buses, trains, boats or planes, people have no choice but to live their own town.
All good and services are only exchanged in the small town.
Many things will change in my life.
Now I take an hour to go my workplace with bus and trains.
But, if there were no transportations, I have to live near my workplace to which I can walk from my home or I should move my workplace near my home.
Also, I would be able to dream to travel around the world.
강사 첨삭
1. Development of many transportations gives us great freedom of movement.
>>The development of many transportations gives us great freedom of movement.
2. We can go anywhere in Korea, even around the whole world.
>>CORRECT
OR>>We can go anywhere in my country, even worldwide.
3. But if there were no cars, buses, trains, boats or planes, people have no choice but to live their own town.
>>But if there were no cars, buses, trains, boats or planes, people have no choice but to live in their own town.
4. All good and services are only exchanged in the small town.
>>All goods and services are only exchanged in the small town.
5. Many things will change in my life.
>>CORRECT
OR>>There will be many changes in my life.
6. Now I take an hour to go my workplace with bus and trains.
>>Now I take an hour to go to my workplace with buses and trains.
7. But, if there were no transportations, I have to live near my workplace to which I can walk from my home or I should move my workplace near my home.
>>CORRECT
OR>>But, if there were no transportations, I have to live near my workplace to which I can walk from my home, or I should move to another workplace near my house.
8.Also, I would be able to dream to travel around the world.
>>Also, I would be able to dream of traveling around the world.
Very nice essay.
- T. Melody ^^
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