9/16 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[What is your idea of a perfect life?]
The perfect life relates to a mental state.
I think that the perfect life is a comfortable mind.
I heard in the Buddhist scriptures that both heaven and hell exist in our hearts.
I absolutely agree with that.
We can think of the same situation differently.
Some hardship can be painful or can be opportunities for growth.
Some people think that they have everything, but they are not rich, and some people think that they have less but are enough.
In Korea, there is a word \'Gap-Jil\'.
It means power tripping to a person of lower position than me.
Although they have a lot of money and politic power, they want to take away money or personality of others.
I don\'t think those people are living a perfect life.
They always have a lot of complaint and hate.
And most of them look very angry.
People\'s face who live a perfect life look happy and relaxed, it\'s really interesting.
I hope to be like that.
강사 첨삭
Wow [이름]! Nice thoughts you gave here! I\'m so impressed not only with your thoughts but you really have improved a lot with your writing! Good job! ^^
Indeed, being happy and satisfied is just a state of mind. If only people learn how to become contented then probably there would be no greed or envy among us. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
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I think that the perfect life is a comfortable mind.
I think that the perfect life is a comfortable mind.
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I heard in the Buddhist scriptures that both heaven and hell exist in our hearts.
I heard in the Buddhist scriptures that both heaven and hell exist in our hearts.
>>I read in the Buddhist scriptures that both heaven and hell exist in our hearts.
I absolutely agree with that.
I absolutely agree with that.
>>CORRECT
We can think of the same situation differently.
We can think of the same situation differently.
>>CORRECT
Some hardship can be painful or can be opportunities for growth.
Some hardship can be painful or can be opportunities for growth.
>>Some hardships can be painful or can be opportunities for growth.
Some people think that they have everything, but they are not rich, and some people think that they have less but are enough.
Some people think that they have everything, but they are not rich, and some people think that they have less but are enough.
>>Some people think that they have everything, but they are not rich, and some people think that they have less but is enough.
In Korea, there is a word \'Gap-Jil\'.
In Korea, there is a word \'Gap-Jil\'.
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It means power tripping to a person of lower position than me.
It means power tripping to a person of lower position than me.
>>It means power tripping to a person having a lower position.
Although they have a lot of money and politic power, they want to take away money or personality of others.
Although they have a lot of money and politic power, they want to take away money or personality of others.
>>Although they have a lot of money and political power, they still want to take away money or personality of others.
I don\'t think those people are living a perfect life.
I don\'t think those people are living a perfect life.
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They always have a lot of complaint and hate.
They always have a lot of complaint and hate.
>>They always have a lot of complaints and hate.
And most of them look very angry.
And most of them look very angry.
>>CORRECT
People\'s face who live a perfect life look happy and relaxed, it\'s really interesting.
People\'s face who live a perfect life look happy and relaxed, it\'s really interesting.
>>People\'s faces who live a perfect life look happy and relaxed, it\'s really interesting.
I hope to be like that.
I hope to be like that.
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