9/19 homework

2018-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[If you were going to a deserted island and could only take three things with you, what would you take? Why?] I want to take my husband, lantern, and writing implement. If I go to a deserted island alone, it will be very lonely. If I can stay there with my husband, I think we can enjoy during few days... hahaha... And for emergency situation, we need a electric lantern to request for rescue. In addition, I want to write the story. So, I will publish a book with the title "The couple who come back" like this ^^ Nowadays, it is popular to stay in temple in the interrupted state with the outside of temple. We call it is 'temple stay'. I think it is very similar situation that we are remained in a deserted island. In the very busy world and society now, sometimes people want to go to a deserted island maybe.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Wonderful thoughts on this one. I actually liked your idea, only that I wonder how you would survive in that island if there weren\'t any food or water there. Also, the situation asked for 3 things. You don\'t see your husband as an object, do you? ^ ^ I\'m just kidding! Well thought of answer though! ^ ^

-Teacher Jedah


I want to take my husband, lantern, and writing implement.

>>I want to take my husband, a lantern, and a writing implement.  
If I go to a deserted island alone, it will be very lonely.

>>Correct
If I can stay there with my husband, I think we can enjoy during few days... hahaha...

>>If I can stay there with my husband, I think we can enjoy a few days together... hahaha...
And for emergency situation, we need a electric lantern to request for rescue.

>>And for emergency situation, we need an electric lantern to be used as a signal for rescue. 
In addition, I want to write the story.

>>In addition, I want to write a story. 
So, I will publish a book with the title \"The couple who come back\" like this ^^

>>So, I will publish a book with the title \"The couple who came back\" like this ^^
Nowadays, it is popular to stay in temple in the interrupted state with the outside of temple.

>>Nowadays, it is popular to stay in a temple in an uninterrupted state.
We call it is \'temple stay\'.

>>We call it a \'temple stay\'.
I think it is very similar situation that we are remained in a deserted island.

>>I think it is a very similar situation as in when we are in a deserted island. 
In the very busy world and society now, sometimes people want to go to a deserted island maybe.

>>In todays very busy world and society, sometimes, what people maybe want is to go to a deserted island.

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