9/2 homework
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I think it is partially a very good idea.
Traditionally, fathers worked and mothers cleaned the house and took care of the children and it worked just fine.
However, since there are more and more moms going to work, their children have no one to look after them at home.
So, nowadays, many children grow up from their grandparents instead of parents.
This is one of the social issues in Korea.
Just a few years ago, the baby break of the father was almost impossible.
But, now the social atmosphere is changing to recommend the baby break of the father after that of the mother.
So, the father can raise his children full-time and become a stay-at-home dad for one year.
Many children who grew up around my age seem to difficult to talk or enjoy with father.
Father had a long time in the company to earn the money for the family\'s living, and they lost time with family.
I think it\'s better to earn the money who can earn more money whether it\'s a mother or a father.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for this homework. I really appreciate the effort! ^ ^
You gave a very good point here. It doesn\'t matter who raises or takes care of the child at home, whether the father or mother. What\'s important is that their children are well nurtured and taken cared of. Some fathers are actually better at taking care of their children. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
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Traditionally, fathers worked and mothers cleaned the house and took care of the children and it worked just fine.
Traditionally, fathers worked and mothers cleaned the house and took care of the children and it worked just fine.
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However, since there are more and more moms going to work, their children have no one to look after them at home.
However, since there are more and more moms going to work, their children have no one to look after them at home.
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So, nowadays, many children grow up from their grandparents instead of parents.
So, nowadays, many children grow up from their grandparents instead of parents.
>>CORRECT
This is one of the social issues in Korea.
This is one of the social issues in Korea.
>>CORRECT
Just a few years ago, the baby break of the father was almost impossible.
Just a few years ago, the baby break of the father was almost impossible.
>>Just a few years ago, paternity leave was almost impossible.
But, now the social atmosphere is changing to recommend the baby break of the father after that of the mother.
But, now the social atmosphere is changing to recommend the baby break of the father after that of the mother.
>>But now, the social atmosphere is changing and that paternal leave is both available for fathers and mothers.
So, the father can raise his children full-time and become a stay-at-home dad for one year.
So, the father can raise his children full-time and become a stay-at-home dad for one year.
>>CORRECT
Many children who grew up around my age seem to difficult to talk or enjoy with father.
Many children who grew up around my age seem to difficult to talk or enjoy with father.
>>Many children who grew up around my age seem to have a difficulty having a talk or enjoying the company of their father.
Father had a long time in the company to earn the money for the family\'s living, and they lost time with family.
Father had a long time in the company to earn the money for the family\'s living, and they lost time with family.
>>Fathers spent most of their time at work to earn money that they lost time with their family.
I think it\'s better to earn the money who can earn more money whether it\'s a mother or a father.
I think it\'s better to earn the money who can earn more money whether it\'s a mother or a father.
>>I think it\'s better to focus on who can earn more whether it\'s the father or mother.
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