9/20 homework
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I have seen many patients in my clinic.
They come to my clinic for various reasons.
If they complain and point out definite lesions, it is easy to evaluate and diagnose the problem.
For example, major chief complaint of patients who visit my clinic is neck mass.
Then, I palpate the neck mass and guess what it is.
I used to prescrible ultrasonography or CT, and sometimes both of them.
When the patients visit me next time, it\'s simple to explain their symptoms on the basis of imaging studies.
On the contrary, if patients tell symptoms that is not explain definitely, it is hard to evaluate and explain.
I\'m worried about how I could pursuade their problems well.
Especially, some patients who don\'t listen to my advice are a a pain in the neck.
I try to explain them kindly and ask them to change their lifestyles and take prescirbed pills consecutively.
But, some don\'t follow my prescription and come again to complain that their problems are not resolved.
In those cases, I\'m so irritated.
강사 첨삭
Hi there, Dr. [이름]!
Convincing patients to be diligent or religious about their medications is the most challenging part of treating them well. We already know that many are not diligent so, our health massively depends on our effort to stay healthy and vice versa. Since this is your most challenging task at work, it may be best to remind them over and over again about the importance of taking the right dosage of their medicine and at the right time.The best combination for cure is a very good doctor like you and a very good patient too.
Meanwhile, your composition was factual and had a clear and flawless transition. If I may put it into a metaphor, your message was just driving with a perfect navigation application- it arrives at the perfect destination, hence, organized and on point. Excellent job as usual!
See you!
-T. Donna~
I have seen many patients in my clinic.
>> Correct!
They come to my clinic for various reasons.
>> Correct!
If they complain and point out definite lesions, it is easy to evaluate and diagnose the problem.
>> Correct!
For example, major chief complaint of patients who visit my clinic is neck mass.
>> Correct!
Then, I palpate the neck mass and guess what it is.
>> Correct!
I used to prescrible ultrasonography or CT, and sometimes both of them.
>> Correct!
When the patients visit me next time, it\'s simple to explain their symptoms on the basis of imatng studies.
>> Correct!
On the contrary, if patients tell symptoms that is not explain definitely, it is hard to evaluate and explain.
>> On the contrary, if patients tell symptoms that are not explained accurately, it is hard to evaluate and explain.
I\'m worried about how I could pursuade their problems well.
>> I\'m worried about how I could (address/ solve/ assist on) their problems well.
Especially, some patients who don\'t listen to my advice are a a pain in the neck.
>> Correct! Very good use of the idiom!
Or: Most especially, sometimes, some patients who don\'t listen to my advice are a pain in the neck.
I try to explain them kindly and ask them to change their lifestyles and take prescirbed pills consecutively.
>> I try to explain to them kindly and ask them to change their lifestyle and take the prescribed pills on time.
But, some don\'t follow my prescription and come again to complain that their problems are not resolved.
>> Correct!
In those cases, I\'m so irritated.
>> Correct!
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