9/27 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
If I can make a law, I would make a law what a lot of fair judges participate in trials to punish criminals. Because I think criminals should be punished appropriately for the crime, but sometimes they don\'t get the punishment. So I think this law is need to people in our society.
강사 첨삭
Hi Ka [이름]! :)
Rules are established to protect the weaker class in the society since they are at a disadvantage if such regulations are broken. When rules are properly set and followed, they provide a stable environment and human co-existence in a community, resulting in peace and order.
I think your suggestion is good. :)
If I can make a law, I would make a law what a lot of fair judges participate in trials to punish criminals.
>> If I can make a law, I would where only fair judges will participate in trials to punish criminals.
Because I think criminals should be punished appropriately for the crime, but sometimes they don\'t get the punishment.
>> I think criminals should be punished appropriately for the crimes they have committed but sometimes they don\'t get the punishment.
So I think this law is need to people in our society.
>> So think this law is needed by the people in the society.
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