9/27 homework
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When I was young, I learned that petroleum resources in the earth will be exhausted within 50 years.
But, we still say that we can use petroleum only for 50 years now.
It is caused by the development of discovering and drilling technology.
We know that the resource in the earth is almost unlimited if we can find and use it.
I think it\'s okay to open up the undiscovered area to access more resources, but the problem is environment change with pollution.
If we can use resource while remaining environmental state and decreasing pollution, it\'s perfect.
If we have to remove the tree and mountain to access more resources, I think it is not a good way.
Now we are living in the high-technology era.
The electricity may be the most important resource in our life, and it comes from natural resources on the earth.
The demand for them is increasing more and more.
I think we can not reduce the demand, so, we should find the proper way to get resource and eco-friendly technology.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for your thoughts and the time you spent with this homework. I appreciate the effort. ^ ^
I totally agree with you, we can make use of the earth\'s natural resources but without compromising the natural and physical state of our planet. ^ ^
Happy Birthday again! ^^ Enjoy your weekend! ^^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
But, we still say that we can use petroleum only for 50 years now.
But, we still say that we can use petroleum only for 50 years now.
>>But to these day, we still say that we can use petroleum for 50 years more.
It is caused by the development of discovering and drilling technology.
It is caused by the development of discovering and drilling technology.
>>CORRECT
We know that the resource in the earth is almost unlimited if we can find and use it.
We know that the resource in the earth is almost unlimited if we can find and use it.
>>We know that the resources on earth is almost unlimited if we can find and use them.
I think it\'s okay to open up the undiscovered area to access more resources, but the problem is environment change with pollution.
I think it\'s okay to open up the undiscovered area to access more resources, but the problem is environment change with pollution.
>>CORRECT
If we can use resource while remaining environmental state and decreasing pollution, it\'s perfect.
If we can use resource while remaining environmental state and decreasing pollution, it\'s perfect.
>>If we can use these resources while maintaining a good environmental state and decreasing pollution, it\'s perfect.
If we have to remove the tree and mountain to access more resources, I think it is not a good way.
If we have to remove the tree and mountain to access more resources, I think it is not a good way.
>>But if we have to cut down trees and destroy mountains to access more resources, I think it is not a good way.
Now we are living in the high-technology era.
Now we are living in the high-technology era.
>>CORRECT
The electricity may be the most important resource in our life, and it comes from natural resources on the earth.
The electricity may be the most important resource in our life, and it comes from natural resources on the earth.
>>CORRECT
The demand for them is increasing more and more.
The demand for them is increasing more and more.
>>CORRECT
I think we can not reduce the demand, so, we should find the proper way to get resource and eco-friendly technology.
I think we can not reduce the demand, so, we should find the proper way to get resource and eco-friendly technology.
>>I think we can not reduce the demand, so, we should find the proper way to get the resources and we must develop an eco-friendly technology.
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