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2022-09-29 · 첨삭 강사 Donna

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I often enjoy watching movies, especially romatic comedy or human drama. It gives me refreshed when I am exhausted, and I simply enjoy it not to think deeply. I also like watching musical movies. They are plenty of wonderful music, and lead to intrinisic interest from my mind. The best musical movie that I watched recently is \'Lala land\'. The scene of LA in the movie was so beautiful, and OST was so good to listen repeatedly. OTT services are rapidly developed, so I could easily watch movies anytime anywhere. It\'s very convenient to select movies that I want and watch movies lying on the sofa and eating cookies. Watching movie is one of the best hobby spending time and it enables people to experience indrectly. I think thanks to OTT services, anyone could enjoy a good interests with ease.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, good day, Dr. [이름]!

Rom-com or romantic comedies can be one of the best escapes since they are very fun and light to watch. They do not demand critical analysis or a roller coaster ride of emotion like thrillers. Choosing a genre always depends on one\'s characteristics. I must say, you have a good taste for movies. ^^

Anyway, your homework answer was substantial, contains sentence combinations, have a few grammar suggestions, and has your distinct writing style. Your transition is impeccable and your flow of thought is as smooth as a river\'s. Kindl go through my suggestions below.

Keep up the excellent skill in writing always!

-T. Donna~

I often enjoy watching movies, especially romatic comedy or human drama.
>> Correct!

It gives me refreshed when I am exhausted, and I simply enjoy it not to think deeply.
>> It gives me refreshed feeling when I am exhausted, and I simply enjoy it not to think deeply.

I also like watching musical movies.
>> Correct!

They are plenty of wonderful music, and lead to intrinisic interest from my mind.
>> They are plenty of wonderful music and they lead to intrinisic interest in my mind.

The best musical movie that I watched recently is \'Lala land\'.
>> Correct!

The scene of LA in the movie was so beautiful, and OST was so good to listen repeatedly.
>> Correct!

OTT services are rapidly developed, so I could easily watch movies anytime anywhere.
>> Correct!

It\'s very convenient to select movies that I want and watch movies lying on the sofa and eating cookies.
>> Correct!
Or: It\'s very convenient to select movies that I want and watch them lying on the sofa while eating cookies.

Watching movie is one of the best hobby spending time and it enables people to experience indrectly.
>> Watching movies is one of the best hobbies to spend time and it enables people to experience indrectly.

I think thanks to OTT services, anyone could enjoy a good interests with ease.
>> I think, thanks to OTT services, anyone could enjoy this good interest with ease.

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