9-6 homework

2016-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Mayleen

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Essay: Do you think companies should offer employees lifetime employment? Yes,I do. I think companies should have to offer employees lifetime. because if employees have too much task so they are so tierd. That will be bad effect to do the work. so I'm sure about employees lifetime employment progrem is going to good effect for increase the work productivity.

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Hello, [이름]! Good evening! ^^ (^_^)//   Thank you so much for accomplishing your homework. It was pretty good and I\'ve read it well. I have made some modification for you to review later on. See you in class! ^^   _T. Mayleen ^_-   Yes,I do. I think companies should have to offer employees lifetime. because if employees have too much task so they are so tierd. >> Yes, I do. I think companies should offer employees lifetime employment because it is tiring to tranfer from one company to another. That will be bad effect to do the work. so I\'m sure about employees lifetime employment progrem is going to good effect for increase the work productivity. >> It could affect their productivity. Offering lifetime employment will boost employyes morale and inspire them to work more diligently.

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